Neglect me; forget me; you do it perfectly well.
When I free myself you will not even realize.
A bruised child left to die in a rotten, hypocritical world.
To hold tightly a hand that will not let go
While I shut myself off for a permanent sense of freedom,
And shed that last tear, one that will merge well with this frown.
Here I linger till that day;
The day I’ll get to really go away.
And trust me, you will not miss me.
PS: This created itself as I woke up on the day of my C slot exam dated 28/04/08. Need I say more?
and how did the exam go??
ReplyDeleteWow ! Exams do get the best out of you :)
ReplyDeleteTo hold tightly a hand that will not let go
While I shut myself off for a permanent sense of freedom
loved these lines.. subtle indication of how faith can lead to freedom. Wonderful! WONDERFUL!
ReplyDeleteTo hold tightly a hand that will not let go
While I shut myself off for a permanent sense of freedom liked that. Nice way of expressing the need for someone u can trust, trust enough to enjoy full freedom as long as they are with you,, to take care of you, to correct you when u cross the line...
Btw, how was your exam? :P
@Thinking-of-a-pen-name
ReplyDeleteIt wasn't too good. :D
@Harish
I should say that I wasn't speaking the complete truth there. The exam didn't really have anything to do with this.
Loved the comment.. Thanks! THANKS!
@Prakash
I guess we have a winner among all the lines. Ah well, it's an ideal world and only a robotic hand would serve the purpose. :D
Poignant and Subtle.
ReplyDeleteSomehow I could identify it with myself. Not exactly exams but metaphorically analogous to many events and relations in life :) Really Nice.
@Aditya
ReplyDeleteAs I mentioned in the previous comment-reply, the exam really doesn't have anything to do with this. The metaphor you are speaking of is exactly what was on my mind as well.
Neglect me; forget me; you do it perfectly well.
ReplyDeleteWhen I free myself you will not even realize.
but I did call you, oh wait was that a night.. don't say ..mare ..dream! phew! :D
good poem, nice work there. but, what did I say about vodka on the night before the exam?
Hey, the consensus seems to be quite different from what I told you when you asked me right after you put it up. Almost makes me re-evaluate. Almost. :)
ReplyDelete@Abhishek
ReplyDeleteThanks. I don't recall you saying anything.
@Abhishek
You ought to be banished!
@RP
My processor follows digital logic only.. so thanks! ;)
neither do i!
ReplyDeleteis it wrong to hope for a miracle?
@Abhishek
ReplyDeleteI suppose not. :|